I Present To You All.... The Magnificent 7!!!!

(Title is read in an announcers voice, with an anticipating pause)

So in class we were asked to do some peer review/ blog commenting on some peer's blogs. When I heard this I was nervous, because I didn't want to critique their writing, as if I am any better.  I was only hoping that no one would hold it against me. 

Before you see the Magnificent 7, here is one of many of the comments on my log that I found helpful.  

Crystal,

I liked your unique approach to this assignment. Sharing your personal experiences in your writing helps the reader get to know who you are and brings reality to the situation.

The only thing I noticed in the beginning was I got lost about halfway through the first paragraph. As you stated, "You are probably wondering where I'm going with this". I think if you had a brief introduction leading to the content of the article or sharing your perspective through comparison, would make this piece even more powerful. I really enjoy your writing and would like to hear more about what you think.

Great job.  

I felt this to be most helpful because it showed me how a reader sees my blog, and how to make what I am saying resignate with the reader in a more powerful way.  It also shows that I should continue to write with my heart, and use personal experiences in life as examples, or comparisons. From now on I am going to try to be more organized in my writing, trying to make sure everything is clear for my readers.

I read and commented on almost every blog that I have access to, but here are the lucky 7 that made it to the list. 

Justin -http://jgamboa808.blogspot.com/2012/10/tmitoo-much-information.html?showComment=1350953086986#c6214200780231439212

Matt- http://lifeorsomethinglikeallofus.blogspot.com/2012/10/lies-embed-our-lives-with-fatigue.html?showComment=1350954043140#c4581771760700413569

Simone- http://wordwidewriting.blogspot.com/2012/10/my-rose-colored-shaped-pyramids-of-giza.html?showComment=1350954242232#c568138336704472729

Liz-http://laneadventuresofliz.blogspot.com/2012/10/access-denied.html?showComment=1350963240503#c2710996638362838338

Jasmine- http://jasminejewelhood.blogspot.com/2012/10/do-we-need-it.html?showComment=1350963848496#c8912792725651769022

Colby- http://mccoolb.blogspot.com/2012/10/divergence-we-stand.html?showComment=1350964180691#c8408113688740974917

And last but not least: 

Robert-http://robertswrittingview.blogspot.com/2012/10/me-no-dumb-me-have-computor-technology.html?showComment=1350964518444#c7144033122121562815

This comment was by far my favorite that I posted. 

Oh Roberto! 
I read this post as soon as it was posted and man, you really hit the nail on the head. Your title is catchy, you into is inviting and alluring, and you end it with a great conclusion... now what to change... PICTURES!! HYPERLINKS!! COLOR! Make the blog appealing to the eye not just the brain. Most blog readers (I know cause I am one of them) look for blogs that catch their eye. There are thousands, err millions, of blogs out there, and I am pretty sure someone else has written about this topic. You want the reader to not only get a feel for who you are as a writer, but with some personality as well. I don't need to comment on your writing, we all know we have Sandy to thank (jk), but just make the blog a little more like a page STOPPER, not just a page turner.